Board Thread:Pitches/@comment-24799839-20150805133228/@comment-25375217-20150813190549

It's better, but I still don't feel like it's ready. I think we're missing a conflict, and that's something every story needs (i've been learning from famous writers so i'm feeling professional right now :P). We know that they're in a band, but what's the conflict? What is their motivation? Etc.