Board Thread:Pitches/@comment-24449517-20150121044540

Hello everyone. This is my first official series pitch!

The story follows 14 year old Jacqueline Storm (though she prefers to be Jacq [pronounced Jack], but her parents call her Jacqueline) who is a princess of the land of Superia (in the hero dimension), a metropolis city/kingdom where people have strange and unusual powers and abilities (Similar to the Wizard World from WOWP). Jacq, is daughter of Mason and Serena Storm two former might heros who once defended the land they now rule. Jacq often goes out and uses her powers to help and wants to be a great hero like her parents and one day take over the kingdom. Queen Serena tells her daughter Jacqueline (she doesn't like to call her Jacq, which Jacq doesn't like) she needs to study and focus more in school and learn to control her powers. When an epic battle starts in the kingdom between an evil force, Mason and Serena feel that Jacq would be safer in another dimension called Earth, where Serena's fraternal twin brother Sam lives due to him leaving Superia, Sam gave up his powers and wanted to live a normal life and is quite happy with his family; his fourteen year old (who is the same age as Jacq) named Blaine, his 9 year old daughter Cora (These are Jacq's cousins), and his loving wife Victoria (who Jacq calls Aunt Vicky). Sam is excited to see Jacq again and Jacq considers him to be a cool uncle, but she quickly learns that things on Earth are much different than they are in the Super Dimension. Jacq now has to hide her identity and changes her last name from Jacq Storm to Jacq Colt to blend in on Earth seeing as Sam's last name is Colt and Serena's last named changed to Storm when she married Mason. Seeing as she doesn't use her last name, she takes the super hero form of Storm girl. Jacq learns to control and use her powers on Earth, when some of the evil forces follow her and try to take control of the human world. She now has to balance being in high school with help from Blaine, adjusting to her new normal life, kicking some serious monster and bad guy butt, and all while hiding her real identity.

About Jacq: Jacq's personality is much like Mabel's from Gravity Falls Star from Star vs the Forces of evil, I actually got inspired by that show a lot, though I gave my version much more detail and a lot more depth I'd like to think personally. Jacq likes to be girly, but isn't afraid to be tough as well, similar to characters like Bella from Bella and the Bulldogs and Star. She wears dresses and and jeans, girly designed shirts and tees and sometimes wears her dresses with boots or tennis shoes. Jacq is headstrong, a bit stubborn and rash at times, though she always has the best interest at heart. She is a good girl who is super nice, though she normally doesn't go by the book, which Blaine does. She gets along with Cora great and Cora even looks up to her a lot and thinks she's super cool. Victoria loves having another girl in the house, though isn't use to her powers yet. Sam is her teacher, since he once had powers he feels he can help her the most.

I didn't know if Storm Girl should wear a mask? Or if Jacq should just wear a glasses and a wig when she lives her normal life like Kara Kent did in JLU. I think the wig thing might work better honestly =)



Jacq's powers include: Super human strength, speed, vision (as well as heat and x-ray vision). The power of flight, super breathe, ice breathe, the ability to not be affected by dangerous radiation, and finally the power to generate wind and lightning to create a sort of storm pulse (this power is the one she struggles to control and develop the most in the series, because it is also the most dangerous). She might be even be a better hero than her mother and father, though she still has a long way to go. She gets her energy from the Sun when she is weak. She also can't really get hurt, this can cause funny scenes like her being at the doctors having to get a shot and the needle breaks and she tries to play it off, the same being as if she's in gym and the ball hits her really hard and everyone is shocked and she's like "I'm okay. . . . .I- I mean ouch!" haha

Anyway, that's my pitch. I think this could be a funny serious, yet with action and a supernatural element. Similar to WOWP, Lab Rats, KC Undercover, The Thundermans etc. I got inspiration from ALL of those shows and Star as well as JLU :) I feel like Jacq is one of those characters everyone can love boy or girl. She's fun, happy, always in a good mood but still kicks butt is a bit goofy and can have slow moments at times.

I am aware of the other super hero school pitch but it was not picked up yet at all and it is completely different from the series I am pitching. I hope everyone reads the whole thing when they are able to. Gleek helped me with some of things but the idea overall is mine. I think I am ready to create my own show and I would love if you guys could support me with honest, constructive criticism along the way. Thanks Again - ChynaGrande101 