Board Thread:Pitches/@comment-25535069-20150106183114/@comment-24074199-20150117221805

Silly1! wrote: The main character, Shelby, can abandon her home (a small town, maybe in Kansas or something) and moves to New York to fulfill her dreams. Her parents can help her try to become a star, and their giving her a month. If she doesn't have a career by then, she has to come home and work on the family farm.

She meets Aubrey (who is going to be the name holder for the famous singer) and Shelby is blindsided by her fame to see her true colors. Aubrey offers Shelby a job in her home, and Shelby agrees. But there's a catch - Shelby's gotta be Audrey's maid. She does all of Aubrey's dirty work, and gets minimal pay in exchange.

A son of a music producer, Rich (Name holder) notices Shelby and takes an immediate liking to her. Her singing while cleaning up Aubrey's mess has caught his eye. He does not sign her right away, but tests her. He pretends to be a college student, and goes undercover as her friend.

Meanwhile, Shelby, who is working as Aubrey's maid, does not like any of this. She has to work for Audrey. She's just about to give up, when she meets college student Jackson (fake name of Rich, also a name holder) who gives her hope to continue a career.

Shelby writes a song about her good experiences, and titles it "Welcome To New York." It was one of the most heart full things she has written in her entire life, until Audrey steals it, claiming that her maid would never make it into the music business.

As Shelby sees how much of a snobby girl that Audrey really is, she wants to expose her, before the release of her newest single, "Welcome To New York." she decides to make her real self come out at the pre-release party, which was going to be live-streamed all across the globe.

Shelby and Jackson decide to do an easy prank - film her while she is backstage. However, Audrey keeps seeing the cameras, and shutting them off before they can catch anything bad of her. Seeing that this would not work, Jackson makes a new theory - instead of filming her saying it, they were going to have her tell them herself.

Jackson and Shelby go through everything, and decide to give her a microphone to wear a couple minutes before the party. They were going to tell her that it was off, but really the microphone is on.

When Audrey is backstage, she gives the cue for the curtain to rise. It doesn't. She keeps commanding again and again, but it must doesn't work. Getting pisses, she turns backstage and complains about how she hated everyone, including her fans, and everyone who supported her, but she doesn't know that she's revealing herself to the world. She turns around and she's busted - everyone knows who she really is.

Jackson then suggests that Shelby sing the song, because she wrote it. Jackson them "turns back" into Rich and makes his dad watch the performance, ti convince him that she's one he should look out for.

Shelby performs sweetly and flawlessly, and everyone grows a liking to her. She then finds out that Jackson is really Rich, and he was faking it the whole time. She's mad at him - until she discovers that his father was a music producer. She kisses him out of excitement, and the two of them end up dating.

In the end, she gets the rights to the single "Welcome to New York" and releases it, starting her long music journey ahead of her. I think this detailed plot would work GREAT! It's an awesome pitch and great plot by Katy, well done! :-) However, I am not trying to tell you what to decide, but this is just my opinion! :D